Friday night, Saturday morning

"Out of bed at eight am
Out my head by half past ten
Out with mates and dates and friends
That's what I do at weekends"

I want to communicate drunkeness...

I think with the misalignment of letters, it is hard to read when spaced around the page in the first layout. In the second, I read the whole text, and not have emphasis one one over another. For these lyrics that works best.